Please, tell me what you think about this simple poem?

I have this for my girlfriend, as just a little surprise. I wrote this as something simple and sweet, so keep that in mind, and also I am but 15.





I‘ll stop loving you when


Diamonds never sparkle


And flowers cease to grow


When thunder doesn‘t echo


And rivers do not flow


When hearts no longer wonder


And hands are never held


When smiles are only memories


And hope is never felt


When trees no longer blossom


And stars refuse to shine


When autumn has no falling leaves


And winter does not die


When days have no tomorrow


And rainbows have no blue


When God alone commands me


Then I‘ll stop loving you.





God Bless.

Please, tell me what you think about this simple poem?
Honestly, for a 15 yr. old guy, I think this poem is very heart-felt and your girlfriend is truly going to love it. I know I did, so keep on writing!
Reply:well that poem's pretty much incredible.





I love it. and I typically have high standards for saying I like a poem. Report It

Reply:Beautiful, any girl recieving this should be amazed!





You have a new fan!
Reply:aah that's very sweet





honestly, she'll love it, great job ^_^
Reply:your definitley good at writing. it was very sweet! im sure shell love it...i though it was really cute...nice simlilies!
Reply:very nice!
Reply:Very strong, unlike some flimsy, weak poems. It has lots of similies, you are a very good writer. Keep writing!!!!
Reply:i think this poem is really sweet. your girlfriend will love it!!!!!!!!!
Reply:Very sweet. ^ ^ I daresay she'll love it.


A little cliche in areas, but aren't all love poems that way?


You definitely have a knack for poetry. : ) Great job!
Reply:that was.............wonderful. Ive never heard something so sweet in my life.





hope this helps!!!!!!!!!
Reply:I thought that one really great man, good job





the girl will love it huh?