My daughter is doing a story can someone help me finish it because ithink she should continue will yuo help?

wild things that kea %26amp; koe discover


chapter #1








"Kea can we go home now" ? grumpely asked Koe " I guess" madly said Kea. They had just went to the great 6 cinema movie theater and saw DRAGONS FIRE FLAME.it was about a dragon that had been born to breath fire. it killed all the dangerous people. but then there was n one else so he started to breath fire everywhere. and the people got so scared that they killed the dragon. It was the winter of ' 94 there so Koe was shivering with his coldness .kea had warned him to wear a coat since it was only gonna be 34 degrees outside. Kea, a girl,at the age of 12 who was in 6th grade . koe was a boy at the age of 7 in the 2nd grade. they where brother andd sister."woof woof"Oh and they have a dog too.its named Lea after there aunt.It's a two year old terrier in dog years that is.It is named after there aunt because she did everything with Kea and Koe she died in 1992 . they wactched the dog play in the snow . while they laughed with coldness and joy mixed together.then the dog started shivering so they had to go then. they went through a lot of snow when then they saw that there dog was lickin snow. they lauighed so hard from the winn dixie smile that they fell in the snow. they sat ther for a few minutes then they got up to start back up on ther way home.


It was about 6 :10 when they finally got home .It took them 20 minutes to get home. "yeah were finally home"!!! said Koe."Screeech" they opened the door . There mom was in the kitchen making a pie . She made the best pies ever. This pie smellt like apple . yummm!!!! said Koe There mother laughed . There mothers name was andrea. She is thirty four. "time for dinner kids Andrea yelled.they were having a big turkey with sweet potatoes and creamy mashed potatoes."yummy" said koe."screech" the doored opened it was there dad Andrew, he was thirty five.Andrew was at work he worked at a factory .


After dinner they had to brush there teeth ,take a shower, and go to bed . the next morning they went to school. Kea was in sixth and Koe was in second.Kea did not like math but did like spelling .Koe did not like spelling but did like math. After school they went to the public libary.Kea and Koe found a book together.It was callled mystery songs.They went to the desk to check out the book."how are you today" asked the librarian? "okay"said Kea and Koe.


On there way back home they took a shortcut through the woods. All of the sudden they saw something strange a snow man that read "CHARLIE". They looked at it for a while then went home.That night they read some of the book then they found a song called CHARLIE THE SNOWMAN. That night they had leftovers .Then brushed there teeth ,took a shower ,and went to bed.


The next morning they didn't have no school. So they went to the woods to see Charlie. They brang the book with them. "maybe if we sing he'll come to life"said Koe. "you can but I'm not "said Kea. When they got There Koe started to sing the song and something happened.Charlie started to move and talk.He said huh (yawn) "that was hard staying still for that long of a time".Kea's jaw dropped to her toes. "what is your name"? Koe asked . "Charliepolopudy but everybody calls me Charlie" said Charlie . "Whoo who's everybody" asked kea."All the snowmen and snowgirls do" said Charlie " Oh" said Kea. " do you want to know something......... do never sing that song to MAX2"demanded Charlie. "why" asked Koe . "Because he's my arch enemy, and he'll be your's some day to"said Charlie.Then Kea and Koe said goodbye and left.Well they didn't believe him .Then Koe wanted to sing so he sang the song he just learned. but Kea looked around for a while .then she said" Ko Ko Koe I don't think you should sing that" but he already had finished . MAX 2 came alive ."ROAR" they ran back to the woods and hided behind Charlie. Then Charlie and MAX 2 had a BATTLE !!All of the sudden charlie yelled " GIVE ME THE BOOK" then he said a magical song and it made him melt for thousands of years. Then they started to cry and said there apologies. then charlie said he had to go and they cried even more. koe siad he didnt want him to go. they walked him back to his home, while koe walkin very slowso he could have charlie stay as llong as possible. then they got there and they said goodbye one more time. koe got very sad and had a tantrum he tolld kea that he was not movin one inch from this spot. as they said that charlie said that he had to go as hey sat in place to be confused to stone . kea pullled koe back so he wouldnt turn into stone too. it was almost too late he cried and said nooooooooooo.


next year next year next year next year next year next yearrlie





CHARLIE OH CHARLIE WHERE ARE YOU

My daughter is doing a story can someone help me finish it because ithink she should continue will yuo help?
If your daughter does not have the heart, discipline, or inspiration to finish the story then she needs to let it lie. A lot of writers will do this, start a story that simply does not flow into completion. Sometimes, later, they will return to the story and finish it. (Stephen King did this with his hugely popular Dark Towers.) Let her follow her muse where and how it leads.





But also, please encourage her to use the grammar and spellcheck programs on the computer. This sample is so full of typos and mistakes and if she has aspirations for her writing to be taken seriously she needs to show enough respect for her writing to try to do it well.
Reply:It rambles on and on. Who cares about what movie they went to see and how good it is? Really. And if she can spell, i mean, even with some typos, that isn't even typo worthy. There arent even mant quatation marks or any punctuation at all. And the idea's a lil whack...