A simple but touching poem?

Please, tell me if you like it








Do you remember our sweet life


When we were so young


And had in our heart no other desire


Than to be clothed and in love





When by adding your age to mine


We couldn't reach forty years between us


And, in our humble little home


Everything, even winter, seemed spring





Beautiful days


The world sat to incredible banquets


My freinds said I was eloquent, and your blouse


Had a pin that pricked me





I read a lot of Plato, but remember nothing


Better than Malbranche and Lammenais


You showed me celestial kindness


With the flower you gave me





Our gardens were a single lilac


You screened the window with your slip


I would use the cracked clay bowl


And gave you the porcelain cup





The great calamities made us laugh


Your lashes burnt your stocking lost


And the beloved portrait of divine Shakespeare


That we sold one evening for our supper

A simple but touching poem?
That is truly beautiful...


I love the imagery that it gives the reader.





While reading it, I was able to feel what you felt, see what you saw, and hear what you heard.





VERY good.





I especially liked the pricking blouse part. =]
Reply:I hope this was a serious effort, because truthfully I loved it. Is this by your sister?
Reply:holy oh ma god...did you rite that! cuz if ya did that is so great even if you didnt that poem has so much meaning it scares me! (but in a good way) This poem rocks!!! So deep
Reply:This is really beautiful. It really makes me think of things. Keep writing. Its amazing. Really it is. :) good luck!
Reply:that is such a sweet and poem that sounds true to the heart. Whoever wrote it should look into getting it published
Reply:Great job. I'ld rather read this than a boring older poem in English!