Opinion on this poem? Please be honest, but kind.....thanks! :)?

Rich smell of turned earth blends


Wood smoke wishes,


Meandering dreams,


To harvest wildflowers in the cooling sun





She wandered to the old maple,


leaves brittle and bright


timothy grown high, clover sweet


cold boulders mounded, tell stories;


ancient crevices hide piercing secrets





Chipmunks scold, jays protest, cicadas whine


lay back we wont hurt you


lay back we won't tell -


overwhelming influence





Cold sun sets on the raucous jabber of distant birds


the screech of the saws quieted.


winter, the poignant distillation of silence,


yet again.

Opinion on this poem? Please be honest, but kind.....thanks! :)?
you are very good with words but try makeing them fit a lil more but other than that it was GREAT





here is a littil one by me





Love is a mystery on


Top of my feet and I


will keep on walking


to loves beat





love messes with your mind


Leaves you no were to hide


Than when all is said and


done leaves you behind





O but love is so


sweet although it hard


To walk to its beat


But if you do it right


With out any fight


than some one might


walk behind








so start your feet


Walking and maybe


You will meat


some one marching


to the same love beat
Reply:Sounds like you are a budding Nature Worshipper as I am. The style is not like Emily Dickenson, but the tone is.
Reply:Very creative! And nice! A lot of detail (maybe a little too much) But VERY nice. it really relaxed me. i'm NOT joking! i really like it! you're very good. i tried to write a poem once and turned out to be so depressing I couldn't even read it! so, KEEP UP the work! =)
Reply:The mixture of images is confusing:


For example "turned earth" sounds like agriculture while "wildflowers... maple [tree]" indicate natural meadow and woods.


The chipmunks, jays, cicadas, ancient crevices, etc, is just too much to conceive.





Consider how the lines of text fit together,


Meter, rhythm, rhyme, can be good things.
Reply:Very beautiful, I could picture an imagine with every word that I read, very good. I have to say that I am more into the depressing poems but yours is nice for a change. My family wont read my poems, they want to cry every time they do, but they are not all that bad. They would love to read yours:)
Reply:For me, poetry is a beautiful art of complex symbols thru intricately words to express and deliver the senses. (I would like to hold this Bless in my blood.)





I am not into poetry, but I went to a poetry recital last week with a group of friends. The poet is a beginner, wrote the poems based on her life experience and in moments that she needed to talk.


I am not the poet friend and did not know about the poet's life. Still, the poems were entertaining - some sad ones but still full of life. I enjoyed the recital, I understood the complicated thread of symbols in each word and the poet's life experience.





I am not sure about yours yet. There are some unconnected symbols between 4 parts to make the whole poem alive. (Have you tried to recite it to someone? What is the theme/title of the poem?)





I might be not getting the poem message. Anyway, I do not consider myself smart in poetry - at all.