How is my poem from 1-10?

and maybe even leave a comment, if u want.





The scarlet winds of springtime


breathes life into these frozen wings of winter.


Oh, how these once icy tears


used to weep through my eyes!





But now I know no sorrow;


all my troubles melt away.


For into your open arms of warmth,


a smile says, I'll stay.





Hey, butterfly. Butterfly, flutter by


and draw a rainbow for these gracious skies.


No troubled cloud is able to cry


for you, butterfly.





So fly with me through the summer and the fall


when those lazy leaves can day-dream


while our two souls soar on the trickling breeze


through the troughs and trees.





And all our thoughtless troubles


will be a thousand miles away.


And i'll be able to open my wings and fly


with your sweetest smiles that say,





Hey, butterfly. Butterfly, flutter by


and draw a rainbow for these gracious skies.


My troubled clouds won't cry a touch of rain


for you fly with so much love, little butterfly.

How is my poem from 1-10?
Not my type of poetry. I give it a 7. Sorry.
Reply:omg i luv it...


so romantic


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Reply:11 good job
Reply:100% amazing
Reply:wow, very good!!





I give you a 10!
Reply:forget that guy who said 11, its a 110, i couldnt have writen somethin like that!
Reply:8 1/2 ..... its very pretty =]
Reply:7-8
Reply:0 peoms are g to the a y
Reply:I'd give it a 6.


It sounds like you just got a whole heap of nice words, and picked any way possible to jam them all into the one poem. Instead of writing out of inspiration and meaning, its more about the words. But you've got the patterning of writing a poem right. All you need is true motivation for the words you choose.





Kirst, Qld Australia.
Reply:10. You write poems better than me.
Reply:It's a ten plus. You are very talented.
Reply:10! all the way! this is amzing. the flow from stanza to stanza never breaks, and the patterns you put in are brilliant! the "hey, butterfly" is amazing. i love the way you put the comma in there to make it gentle, not commanding or bossy. you should get that published!
Reply:I really like it, the only thing I'm having trouble with is the scarlet winds. Scarlet clouds I can see but not scarlet winds. the rest of the poem is a 10. Maybe do a perpetual winds of springtime or something to that effect.
Reply:Two thumbs up


10/10


U ROCK
Reply:wow - definatley a ten, very well written hope to hear more of them from you.
Reply:10 I like your play on words especially the third verse, the first line.
Reply:8-9

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