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A Daughter of Eve





A fool I was to sleep at noon,


And wake when night is chilly


Beneath the comfortless cold moon;


A fool to pluck my rose too soon,


A fool to snap my lily.





My garden-plot I have not kept;


Faded and all-forsaken,


I weep as I have never wept:


Oh it was summer when I slept,


It's winter now I waken.





Talk what you please of future spring


And sun-warm'd sweet to-morrow:—


Stripp'd bare of hope and everything,


No more to laugh, no more to sing,


I sit alone with sorrow.

Do u like this poem?
I like it, but it's a little bit cryptic. It would be more satisfying if you would give a hint as to why she is sad. Like what did she do. Is she guilty for what her mother Eve did. Or she's just like Eve. She can't be remebering what it was like before vs. after Eve picked the apple because she wouldn't have been born yet. Keep going with it.
Reply:Its okay kinda sad
Reply:I enjoyed it
Reply:boo hate that poem
Reply:VERY nice--did you write that??





KUDOS!!
Reply:It's not bad
Reply:Very good poem..... Line 3 in verse 1.... one really has to put the emphases on "comfortLESS". It sort of derails the smooth beginning.





The second line in verse two may need one more syllable perhaps or put a pause in there between "Faded" and "and".... getting rid of "and" all together.





Just my feeling :)
Reply:ive heard better ones.
Reply:It is very good, and has a deeper meaning within the words.


:) kara
Reply:It doesn't matter if anyone likes your poem. Just keep writing. And reading. Let everything touch you and write it down on paper. Don't quit because someone doesn't like what you write. For every person that says they hate or love what you write, you''ll find someone with the opposite view. Poetry has to well up from inside you and be impossible to hold back.
Reply:Yes, it is a lovely poem with wonderful symbolism.